Thursday, April 14, 2011

IPB1

This was some adventure huh?
It was a warm summer day. Fintan rolled out of bed at the usual time, one o'clock in the afternoon. Immediately he said to himself "today is going to be a great day". He thought this because he was going to have a basketball game today. It was the first game of the summer intramural basketball season at the University of Minnesota. Fintan arrived before any of his teammates, five minutes before the game. He watched some clips of Lebron James' famous crab dribble to prepare himself for the game until his teammates arrived exactly five minutes later. The referees showed up five minutes after that and the game started right about when everyone thought it would. Fintan had usually been able to score about twenty points per game with around fourteen rebounds. Today was different. Fintan had the best game of his life. He scored sixty points and had thirty rebounds. His team won and he was the MVP. The team decided to at blarney's in Dinkytown. Fintan had a pretty convincing fake I.D. so it was not a problem for him to be served. The team had a great time and drank late into the night. After a while Fintan's teammates started leaving and eventually Fintan was the last one there. He left Blarney's right when it closed at 2am. He was walking home by the river when a man jumped out of the bushes and attacked him. The man took his laptop and his wallet, but Fintan was able to keep him from taking his phone. He started to dial 911 when he realized that he was drunk and under 21 years old. Calling the police was not an option, but he had to get his laptop back because it contained the only copy of his dunk video where he came in second beating Lebron James, John Wall, and Jimmer Fredette. The only guy to out dunk Fintan was Tim Duncan. It was the greatest dunk video ever made and ESPN offered one million dollars for it. Luckily his good friend, Tim Duncan, was still in town. Fintan decided to call Tim Duncan for help. Tim arrived by the river shortly. Fintan was able to trace the location of his laptop with his cell phone. Tim drove over to the man's house with Fintan and roughed the man up until he was able to recover Fintan's stuff. Tim gave Fintan a ride home and signed some Spurs 2011 NBA championship gear for him. The next day Fintan sold his video to ESPN for one million dollars and courtside season tickets to Spurs games.

1 comment:

  1. Zack, your character Fintan had some adventure. I would suggest in terms of improving the quality of your story divide it into more than one paragraph and use more sensory details---give your reader a vivid image through words.

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